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I'm reviewing from my mobile, since I was too impatient to use my laptop, haha! So it won't look as extensive as it possibly could. At any rate, I enjoyed ...

Reminds me of Romeo and Juliet. Or rather, this one series by Caroline B. Cooney- though, darn, the title escapes me! However, I do so enjoy it. The imagery I'd ...

Admittedly, the ONLY part that bothered me, and it's rather insignificant, is how you rhyme only one line. But, quite frankly, it adds the lyrical aspect of the entire piece, ...

A woman. As someone who once dated the ladies, I have to say, this describes them all too well. How their moods change, and leave you on the edge. How ...

In the first three lines alone, you're being rather redundant. And in that... fourth sentence, I=if. Windshield wipers go "back and forth, back and forth". It makes more sense. "[a] ...

Everyone always beats me to the errors! But, it seems that he pointed out the important problems. However, I do have a suggestion. When posting a short story, it's good ...

Haha! Very creative, and hilarious. The slight sarcasm buried in the piece add so much more spice to the humor of the poem! I greatly enjoyed this piece. No grammatical ...

This is sort of how I'm feeling right now, very lost but wanting so much to be found and forgiven. It gives me a bit of support knowing I'm not ...

Very nice! Though, Hell's Kitchen certainly didn't come to mind! Actually, when reading this, it reminded me of the book Dorian Gray, you heard of it? It's about a man ...

Instead of "twinkly 'plink'", try something more along the lines of, 'high-pitched "plink"'. The only time you use single quotes is when you're already using them, like in dialogue. And ...

,y= my. say= saw. SPELL CHECK. It takes WAY less to read over your story than to write it, trust me. As for the sounds the animals make, try just ...

Your use of the word "that" is excessive. Please fix "that".(; Somply= simply. Clicks= cliques. "Reached to my blue locker"= reached my blue locker. Sorry to be so nit-picky, but ...

This leaves much to the imagination. Could be a psycho ex-lover left in the dust and plotting a way to get her beloved back. In the most vile of ways, ...

There are two other parts? I might just go read, haha! This was most amusing, even for a short parody piece. It reminds me of those "Chatroom" situations you see ...

your gather= you gather. The way you break off in stanzas seems chaotic, which doesn't, in my opinion, represent the mood of the narrator. The person speaking is more at ...