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Aw, I'm so jealous of you! This is incredibly sweet; I can't believe how well you draw, and how well you took the description into your own hands- literally! I ...

I... don't... understand. :| In all honesty, I've lived and am related to a compulsive liar. They don't act this way. But the humor did make me chuckle, I'll admit. ...

Well, I am as good as one . That's truly the only grammatical thing that caught my eye. As for the piece as a whole, it has potential, I will ...

Author's Note: Another amateur poem from the public domain. Enjoy. Quit staring at me with those large, round eyes. I don't deserve your scrutiny, their lies. I'm not the beauty ...

Instead we seem childish First off, I fell for it! Haha! I'm in class, so trying my best not to chuckle too loudly. x) Second, I must commend you for ...

neither gently nor harshly... But waiting [for you] is like waiting for the rain to fall in a drought... I'm glad you said you wouldn't change anything; I don't believe ...

It is about giving everything that you can give. They go out of their way to change other... You mainly have slight issues that need to be read over, nothing ...

I was going to point out a few minor errors, but it looks like some people took care of that for me. But I have a comment. And people might ...

My favorite line, which I'm sure you've heard more than once: Everyone you thought you loved, and everyone you thought you trusted, turned around to stab you, with a knife ...

No sarcasm? I guess this is your way to change the plot from one setting to another. Very idealistic. It seems Chance is building up a party; very ideal in ...

Very humorous dialogue! I enjoyed this story entirely, it gave a much more clear view on Ryder's role before he'd been thrust into the air, haha! I like how Jot ...

I'm so confused on Ryder's role! Is he a thief, or someone who is actually willing to aid Chance in his quest? I'm utterly puzzled. But I'll read on to ...

Not a lot of grammatical errors, honestly. And it seems that the first commenter did just that for me anyway. However, I would like to ask some questions that you ...

I like to nit-pick before reviewing the piece as a whole. Here a some problems that slowed me down while reading: ...salt filled air filling her lungs... Replace "salt filled" ...

the motion behind the pen, the heartbeat inside my fingertips, and my fingertips beneath your chin that matters in the end. This is absolutely my favorite line. This poem was ...