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Re: Romeo & Juliet: Instant Messaging Edition
HILARIOUS! I even showed my friend, we couldn't cease laughing! This is one of the most creative interpretation of Romeo & Juliet I've read! Favorite quote #1: Benvolio: You misspelled ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Mi sol, mi sol
First off, thanks for the translation! It really helped a lot. I went back and read your piece- the Spanish part- as a whole, and it seemed to speak more ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Rejection
There's a lump in my throat that just won't go away
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Drugs
First and foremost, you MUST reread your work and make sure all grammatical errors, if anything else, is correct. Drugs Why people do drugs? They hear it's bad They know ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: Just Joined
Welcome, Seven. You will surely enjoy it here on YWS, the people are very hospitable and helpful with critiquing. You will get the occasional doucher who has nothing nice to ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: Hey
There's an introduction forum for new members. I can't remember where you'd find it, but it won't be difficult to so. If you wish for anymore help, please message any ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: 248
To Alabama, Kentucky, and Tennessee, to Georgia, Virginia, and Mississippi. To the 248 families forever changed, to the lives gone, or rearranged. To the brave souls who lost their home ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Happy Birthday, Teenager
But even though you’re a vandal and a spreader of litter, you’re still the first parent’s call when they need a sitter! ^^ Favorite stanza, I must admit. Because it ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: My sister's art
Aw, I really liked the panda one. Is that the WWF logo? It surely looked like it. And the wolf one was rather creative. I like her work, she should ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: To My Stalker
HA! This was utterly humorous. I mean, okay, stalkers aren't exactly funny business, but the very last stanza: So, I warn you, lousy mutt, you come near me, I'll kick ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Dear, YWS
With friends and with enemies life feels kinda tough. I don't like the way this runs. Maybe move "life" down to the third line? Favorite line: Everyday I visit you ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: deleted
Grammar is absolutely everything if you're willing to brave public scrutiny. That will be the VERY first thing they point out. If they don't like the way it's written, the ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Don't Mistake This Smile
[quote]But, here we are. Two lovers intertwined. My hand in yours. And yours in mine.[quote] Why is this the only line that rhymes? Did you do this on purpose? What ...
Apr 19, 2011 -
Re: Please don't eat me!
HA!!!! This was adorable! =) I tried so hard not to laugh (in class, haha). I truly did enjoy this sweet little piece. Nothing nit-picky to report (you're only twelve, ...
Apr 19, 2011 -
Re: Once More
In turn I return No. No no. Try " Thus I return" and now the wailing wind is simply wind I'm not sure if this runs smoothly either, in my ...
Apr 19, 2011
