Palantalid

if you see this seething world at a glance- so much is unexplained. i recently turned my train of thought (around two months- maybe three) to this sequence of unexplained ...

ermmm.......i guess it wasn't a badd poem but i'm afraid i dont connect very well with it. i just thought i'd tell you this though- "I excepted you and never ...

hahaha... i like your style. makes you seem like a nun......oops forgive me i was talking about the above post. may your blessings be with you too. the poem was ...

Oooooooooooo....this reminds me of 'mourning becomes electra' but that's the musical, i think, so it's fine, or maybe it's a common phrase in poetry? i still have a lot to ...

using the name 'land between the rivers' you instantly made me beleive that this poem is about Babylon because 'land between the rivers' is a literal transalation of Mesopotamia ,i ...

Here I turn to fantasy, For I have no want for reality, Keep them well, These dreams of hell, And heaven and what comes after, These are merely lies, And ...

what a fantastic effect. i was watching the apparent scrambling of the lines but it is a lot more than that. i couldn't see the patter you were using. this ...

. eerrmmm........i hope this clarifies. if you want any changes then please go ahead. so the next stage is that all of you are in the main hall of the ...

well, guess what, i decided to pop back and things have more ways then revision. i read it a couple of more times and voila i saw the sneeky genius ...

firstly, congratulations on this neat array of readers and critiquers. you have something in that poem that reall strikes deep. as for originality issues i think it was quite a ...

hey now that's a great seeths with deception, ignorance and hiding in ltttle niches..........you've used some good wording. it seemed abstract however and maybe that is why i didn't get ...

God Glances Down Sometimes In the heart of night, is a glimmer of light, A mirror for the vainest star, Before the fall, is a clarion call, That causes our ...

man, these kinds of peices always impress me. sounded like i was talking to a lunatic. sounded good. you should write for a magazine unless you already do. unfortunately i ...

hey, that was great. it was just like the 'simple' you described in the first line. i also thought that maybe a nursery rhyme couplet rhyme might just have fit ...