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Re: Coffee Stain & Cruel is the night
Coffee Stain On the roads, I pass by them and they glance, look me over, and I don't have a chance to hide that muddy cloud, that bleary mark of ...
Sep 3, 2010 -
Re: To Myself When I Become 33
Firstly, 33 because that's the age at which Jesus was nailed to the cross and got himself pierced by the spear of destiny. It's also the age at which Hart ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: To Myself When I Become 33
When you have lived three and thirty years and find yourself more than twice as old as I am now, ask yourself how well you have moved on after my ...
May 15, 2010 -
Re: hart (pts 1 & 2)
Kylan, I thought I'd start by making a quick list of similes/comparisons of any sort- >peaches...like Adam's apples >skin hanging off his bones, like windless sails >underbelly/of the veranda sags ...
Mar 12, 2010 -
Re: (E&iC) Dictionary [Part One]
Hilarious. Totally!
Feb 16, 2010 -
Re: Chair and Chamber
I'm afraid this isn't stream of consciousness (which is supposed to read in the same forms and sequences in which we think). I guess the fact that the verses got ...
Feb 16, 2010 -
Re: Behind Windows
Winnie, I enjoyed this poem quite bit. Though it was rather simple and I have little to go by, I'd say you have all the necessities to continue writing good ...
Feb 14, 2010 -
Re: Chair and Chamber
Chair and Chamber Thrash, thrash against your bounds throwing your head back to see who is pulling you up out of the muck, the gas, the ache, the simple chair ...
Feb 13, 2010 -
Re: i am an idiot
Vanadis, despite your having only started on poetry recently, the fact that you haven't jumped in with a poem that blares with crudeness and lack of thought gives me great ...
Jan 27, 2010 -
Re: On Breaking Out of the Mold With Fantasy Races
That's right, a little more ingenuity in fantasy is wanting. A brief look at the skeletons for some of the races: 1)Wise, noble, pure, ancient Ones 2)Humans (apart from the ...
Jan 12, 2010 -
Re: Let the number be x
Let the Number be X Of all our open wonders, the one that wounds us most – how this relentless Music outlives us and our ghost. And all the unknown ...
Nov 17, 2009 -
Re: Acomia- Land of Dragon Trainers- part 2
Sorry this is a little late... Yeah, I won't do any nitpicks because too may people have gone into those already. Just a few pointers and comments, okay? Firstly, about ...
Oct 30, 2009 -
Re: Strange Love III-The butterfly effect
Hey Gunner! Regardless of whether you support Arsenal, I'm sticking this name on you, okay? I'm not going to go into nitpicks as you'll realise Storm_Bringer's spotted all the little ...
Oct 23, 2009 -
Re: Birthing Complications
Heather! Really nice to see a poem of your's again. I must say that it's really nice to see a refreshingly simple list poem on here. I enjoyed the conversational ...
Oct 22, 2009 -
Re: Dr. Plant's Diagnostics (mostly verse and short stories)
Confession Booth: Ahem. Well, there's a reason why I hadn't done this till now. You see, though I read quite a few works every time I visit YWS, I sometimes ...
Oct 22, 2009
