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Dibs on first crit? lol

I love that the character stays consistent, his voice stays the same throughout the whole piece. The ending was a bit shocking at first, but the more I thought about ...

But but.... PM me when you're open again darling? I miss your reviews.

Never did I think it possible, To feel the way I do, I cry myself to sleep at night, All because of you. Weak first stanza, I am stuck with ...

What Aet? You don't totally luv the sparkily vampire? With his bare chest and his scintillating arms? Zomg, you're kidding. /sarcasm.

Using a bit more detail and giving your characters more depth is key. Detail where? I mean it's practical advice, but examples would be helpful here. "More detail" is pretty ...

I stood behind the hostess stand, mindlessly wiping down menus just to give my hands something to do. It was early afternoon, and Boogie’s Diner was less than packed. My ...

They are adorable, yes?

Lissa, Exotic Slave The man with the “food” came round to her cage and opened the door. Lissa stared at him in confusion for a moment, before realizing he was ...

Watch it, embrace it, worship it. It's amazing.

I thought perhaps by making HER go into her bosses office, I was making it clear that she was in fact at work. Also, the 'oh that Vanessa is so ...

Edit: This is NOT a one shot. There is more coming. Isn’t it ironic, how old habits die hard? Isn’t it just oh-so humorous? When I was six years old ...

Sure, Twilight is good for something. It's a great comedy.

There is a reason why people live so much longer today then they did throughout history. Humanity "turned out ok" without medicin, sure, but they also died a lot younger. ...

Lissa, Exotic Slave Lissa felt herself smile; amused at the chivalry. It had been a while since she had been in the company of a Gargoyle. She had not forgotten ...