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{Author's Note: You might want to go back and read the end of Chapter 5, Part 1 if you're a bit lost here :wink: } Once the Backdoor slammed shut ...

Hi again, megsug! Mmm, I'm finding less and less to critique as I go on! A very good sign... ;) I really loved this installment. I adore your description of ...

Hi again, megsug! Mmm, another lovely instalment! I really like the way you set this up - though I'm not sure how crazy I am that the Masquerader's gender was ...

Hiya, megsug! First off - I really like this plot and can't wait to read more on that basis. Personally, I don't mind info-dumps in prologues as long as they ...

Thank you :) As for the Ewan thing, yeah, I thought it would be confusing... you actually meet him briefly in chapter 2, when he brings Lucy a wheelchair and ...

Hi there! Hmm... you say you're a harsh reviewer? Well, I think I'd like a fresh look at my current brain-child, "Angels", if it isn't too much trouble! (I have ...

{Author's Note: I'm not quite finished with this chapter, but I have a feeling it'll be way too long of a read when it's done, so I'll just post the ...

Hiya! Well, I usually start with the bad and then segway into the good, but most of my nitpicks were already picked up by Speele, so I won't go too ...

{Author's Note: Every novel is entitled to at least ONE creepy dream chapter! Here's mine :smt003 } Scores of down feathers, held briefly aloft by a gentle breeze, float through ...

Hi again, and might I say, another job very well done! Okay, this time, I'm going to start with my criticisms... She didn’t look like she was waiting on or ...

Wow, this was truly fantastic! I love the way you write - you have a real knack for developing your atmosphere; your descriptions walk that treacherous tight-rope between offhand and ...

Hmm... very nice. Let me start off by saying that I am not a fan of short chapters. Not to critisize your choice of chapter length, or anything. I can ...

{Author's Note: 1. Yes, I know that 12 year olds are in 7th grade, and no, putting a 7th grade class in an elementary school is not a mistake - ...

I know this is a rather perverted look at the whole thing, but as I was reading this piece, all I could think of was the "Sexual Education" sketch from ...

Ah, how many times I've tried to get my own creation stories off the ground... :) This was reeeeeaaallly good! I have no real nitpicks; it flowed very nicely and ...