Omnihat

Aww, this is sad in a way. But almost cute at the same time. I like it very much. It's not too long, but doesn't feel too short either, it's ...

Firstly, nice work. I wasn't planning on reviewing something so long, but after reading just a few lines, I found I didn't care. I wanted to know what was going ...

I love the concept with the child in the eye, and it's very well done you're an amazing artist. I think mostly everything has been said except: On the hand, ...

Love it. It's a very, very short prologue, but it in only a few lines it gives you a nice feel to the novel and what it's about, all the ...

Hey. It was set off for the most prestigious and prosperous of the citizens called “The Aisles.” The Aisles began to come into my sight as I quickened my pace. ...

Thanks you guys for the honest comments. They're very helpful and I appreciate them, I'll remember your suggestions for the future. :)

Given the chance, would you save a life? Even if you must suffer through their strife? Given the chance, would you help a friend? Even if it’s your life you ...

Nice work! The rhyming is good, and you haven't just used a bunch of generic words for it. I love the way you ended it, repeating words from the beginning ...

I really like this idea, it seems interesting and different. I would like to see how you develop it further in to a novel. My only concern is, why does ...

Hey. As you can tell I'm brand spanking new, and this is my first post. This is the first chapter of my novel and (obviously) I really want some criticism ...