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You repeat bird, song, heavy, breaking, white, uncaring, moon, sorrow, white (again), uncaring (again) and moon (again). Buy a thesaurus and "perpetuable" is not a word, try "perpetual". Apart from ...

There really isn't much room to write anything inside this little...

Didn't seem to head anywhere to me. You repeat "pen" in the first line and "writing" in the second line. The colon on line 3 should just be a comma. ...

Johnathan Stroud - The Bartimaeus Trilogy is brilliant, funny, original, well written etc. Alison Croggon - Amazingly well though out Pellinor series, also very original. H G Wells - The ...

Nice, Gambler, that was perfect. "Once upon a time in a happy, nice, good, fun, joyful place the smurfs were dancing and smiling..."

Animal Farm - George Orwell The Time Machine - H G Wells The Gift - Alison Croggon Schotts Original Miscellany - Ben Schott Foundation and Earth - Isaac Asimov (or ...

Sordid puncturing describes it best, A matter of confliction. Not once in many years gone hence has Failed our loyal conjunction, As monotonic interjections, Layered with vilest remorse, Cut right ...

I think its beautiful the way this flows. The rhythm works brilliantly. The rhyme scheme matches the rhythm and aids the fluidity of the piece. I think it's great.

I like the style, short and icy. I don't think that the hyphens in the first stanza are necessary. I really enjoyed it.

good point. naughty me. [slaps hand]

That is precisely the effect I wanted the piece to have. There is no replacement for the ellipses and the " shows that the whatever-it-is exists, whereas the second " ...

An Inevitable Conclusion “I am. I exist. Why? Why do I exist? Do I have a… reason? I exist to know I exist? No. That is incorrect. If I did ...

Perfectly ridiculous and eloquently so, as always. I loved this, the idea is so absurd that I can do nothing but stutter in disbelief.

Brilliant picec. Claudette: I think you are being too harsh. To start with the sentence with the four -ly words is a long sentence and does not sound strange at ...

Hilarity at its finest. One can say no more but can wonder a your abstract absurdity.