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A good poem, original, with a neat rhyme scheme, but lacking in a definite structure, such as a fixed number of syllables per line. Punctuation would be good too.

A nice haiku. I disagree with Incandescence though, I like haikus, althought they can be more shallow than longer poems. Writing several haikus in series is good as well, perhaps ...

"In the life, exist two ways" - why not say "two ways exist". It's much simpler, I see no need to make it unnecessarily archaic. Also, why is it "the" ...

Oh dear. To reiterate what Incandescence said, why would you want others to read a piece of work that "sucks" so much. To show people how not to write? If ...

that bogeys look

Rool Monkeys! Sweet

I searched for the holy father, The mighty divinity; I found my God in a mirror, He was smiling back at me. I looked for the deepest of truths, For ...

Granted, but it has nine legs, no tail and an extra eye. And it can't breathe. I wish I was a potato.

"six years had passed since our father left" - capital S. "When i reached my room" - capital I. Very empathetic piece. I can really feel the emotions you are ...

You use a full-stop in the first line then use none for the rest of the poem. I would choose one way or another. I enjoyed this very much, you ...

"The cold on m tongue" - "my". "sending the ice skidding across the table, leaving a wet trail in its wake" - no comma needed. "Moms hair" - "mom's". "Her ...

Rule Monkeys! I just checked the Memberlist and around half the people who have ever joined have one post or less. But I would have thought that there were around ...

Whoa. Scummy scum that is. :( *Sigh* Some people....

"The wind blew leaves prematurely from the trees" - that sounds like a line from a poem. "It’s the end…” - no ellipsis needed, she is not interrupted, a full-stop ...

"auidiences of quills" - "audiences". "fingers as dusts" - I think the plural of dust is "dust". "that have setted" - "that have set". The way you leave a lot ...