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Urn Burial - Robert Westall. It made me feel so guilty.

"You are the one by my sword you will die.." - comma after "one". Extra full-stop at the end. This was not brilliant, it does flow quite well but the ...

I havent read annything like this before , in books too , and i dont believe your fifteen either. stop looking for compliments like these , write a book and ...

Very funny, you leave no opportunity for criticism. It's brilliant.

You waited 21 minutes, just be patient! Please! Anyway, I didn't really like it, it's not completely original, you just continue an old children's rhyme. Gurby

Well... 7/10

If heaven were imaginable I would not strive to be in it.

Makes no sense, you're just mucking around. Please keep your random musings to yourself. Write something properly. Gurby

Maybe, if you were patient. There are times when not many people are online. Also, you cannot expect a great flood of reviews instantly, when you're a relatively new member ...

This is a list of words which happens to form an acrostic of the alphabet and it makes very little sense when read. Although it is unique and creatiive, it's ...

I don't remember most of my dreams but there is one odd one that occurs every now and then: I'm lying in my bed. The curtains are closed, the lights ...

7/10 Booombollinchkii

"sputtering indignantly" - I'm confused, I keep thinking that's supposed to be "spluttering". "The Geezer’s voice cut through the ominous silence, looking positively livid." - does the Geezer's voic

Hehe 10/10

Good, but short, write more! I cannot make any suggestions/criticisms, not much happens.