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Rewritten: (Not) My Friend A hand-shake, “Hi, I’m Charlie” And it begins. Now, as friends, We can share all Rumour, tales and Fun, and the shame Of embarrassment will Not ...

"Absolute subjectivity is like locking oneself in a box, throwing away the key and shouting that all one can be sure of is the dark. Because, of course, there's nothing ...

"Evergreen Hall" - inconsistent name with the rest. They're all so... fantastical but then this is like, oh, Redwall. Just wondering but if it's "the" pegasi shoudn't it have a ...

"Do I exist lol is that a joke . yes" - you could be but a product of my schizophrenic imagination, there is no proof in the whole world for ...

"It was a sunny day when Charli Darnay woke up wednesday morning." - OK, lots here. "Charli"? surely you mean "Charlie"? You say "day" and then "Wednesday", it's redundant. It ...

First: :shock: Second: it's OK but a little random Third: ROFL, quite literally - the randomness! Fourth: Oh dear *descending whistle......CRASH* Fifth: SO LIKE COMPLETELY 100% TRUE! Sixth: Didn't sho

If I told my parents that I was having trouble with my faith or religion and needed some time out or something, they would support me completely. However, if I ...

I intended this piece to resemble a piece of music. It starts slowly, as Claudette says, because many pieces begin with a introduction that picks up pace gradually. The whole ...

Fluent Sliding melody Bellows thought through Sweet vibration Coerced by finger, Thumb and bow. Resonate, fine 'cello, With my passion freed By someone else's song That flows through Tainted arm ...

Gerjibarrr!!! Not the first post, agarrr, but still, the first review! "What really scared Leah, though, was not the sea-serpent or the undines; it was that the tide was still ...

"i read pet sematary and i'm 11 years old..." -really, your profile says you're 20. As for the story, if it isn't finished yet then finish it before expecting full ...

First of all, check through the piece and find all of your spelling mistakes, then go through and add all the missing capital letters, then go through and put in ...

*falls off chair* "in a falsely gentlemanly voice" - just sounds clumsy. "in a false, gentlemanly voice" sounds better. "Gentle, but surprised, but he hid this as efficiently as Leah ...

"People bought it, and people liked it." - it isn't that simple. A book is, unfortunately, sold by how many you can see in the shop window just as often ...

I'll ignore spelling, grammar etc. and focus on the style. Many parts of this are really too concise: "Dreg had learned to speak from a dying traveller who been attacked ...