OblivionShadow

thanks people except for the two that were 1) harsh and 2) said everything the first one said constructive critique was never meant to heart warming, yet never meant to ...

Outside his home they plant the mines we hear the hollers screams and cries If they come outside people blow up like pure sodium and water without turpentine It's all ...

This is like Oblivion because nobody knows you This is like an orphanage no real home to go to Its like Antarctica, its harsh and its cold too Like paper ...

*whistles* i can feel the emotion emanating from the poem XD you do well in expressing your thoughts and feelings through poetry. keep it up =)

*whistles* whoa. you almost confused me, but i pretty sure i got it. i'm blown away i love stories that make me have to go back and say "oh, i ...

forgot to mention its free verse. i'm not particularly into following a fixed rhythm. i just put my thoughts on paper in the best way possible. but i will definitely ...

My heart hurts. It flows with the blood consisting of water, nutrients and pain. It weeps to replace the tears I said I wouldn't cry. How did you creep up ...

As it seems, jennnafina caught all the grammatical errors so i only have positive things to say XD. I like the particular language usage for the both of them using ...

i agree with the comment about shivers. Its very cliche at this point. However, for the rest of the poem is well written i love how you bring it to ...

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riddle three is for the others....it'll require further thought

I was the suicidal emo that goes through more drama than Britney Spears "O I'm not crazy" if i said that then I'd be lying like a closet queer. The ...

I'm not one to critique on grammar nor spelling. Sometimes it's used intentionally for a specific effect. This poem is very...interesting. I'm somewhat confused, but i think just a little ...

I like the dono XD Way better than i can draw that's for sure. i'm more into abstracts.... I really like it though dinosaurs are awesome XD