Nutty

Jason grinned wider at Leal. "Oh come on, I was just looking for some kind of fun." "Greasers don't go beat on socs for the hell of it!" "No, we ...

Jason stared at the sky, and sighed. Another bleak day of his new life. He tugged at his leather jacket, drawing it tighter around himself. He liked leather. A perk ...

Hey Stella! I just read your story- nice work. Welcome to YWS! And a heads up- use proper punctuation and grammar when posting on YWS. It's one of the rules, ...

But how could he, for although he couldn’t speak. For although he couldn't speak what? 'Although' implies there would be something he could do. It's sort of like using 'but'. ...

Hmm, I like this. Though the dialogue got confusing, I suggest you start a new line when a new person starts speaking. It makes who is speaking clearer, and the ...

Nutty wanders through the door, notices the song, and starts singing at the top of her voice. "Just a little pinprick... there'll be no more AAAAaaaargh..." Nutty blinked at all ...

Oh I love Card. My favorite one would have to be Ender's shadow, though, Bean rocks. Anyway, welcome to YWS! If you've got any questions, feel free to send me ...

Tears flood here eyes, her Why she suddendly went cold. Suddenly Now I'm not much of a poet, but is there a purpose to the underlines? Maybe there is, and ...

I love van gogh! So, I would be most upset if someone ruined one of his pictures. And considering this is my favorite, I would be doubly upset. Luckily for ...

It's good... but I was looking at the girls face trying to figure out what made it look weird. I think the eye is in the wrong place... or maybe ...

the tird time Uhh... third between to different two it provided quit an amusement for Him and his subjects. Quite between to females, both a soft pail gray color with ...

:lol: This story reminded me of a fable. It made me laugh, too. I loved the start. Very clever However, fact is there is a turtle dancing and talking, but ...

Improved, though now I can see a few things that don't quite work. She didn't say thank you for her chain. She doesn't seem unpolite, so I would have thought ...

my character (james) will be Twilight's guardian

Oh and summergirl, I'll gladly be twilight's guardian ^^