Nutty

They are awesome. ^^ I live in New Zealand and they don't remind me of here- I was actually wishing we had ice like that here :p But then I ...

"But they smell so weird... and their not green, or red (unless provoked or made feel ashamed) Get rid of the brackets, brackets just don't work in dialogue, really. They ...

Hey, Anzius. Here see the old concrete building, built by those puny things that call themselves humans. Here should have a comma after it. In this old concrete building that ...

I stood outside the rotten, iron gate looking into the old, abandoned manor. Get rid of old. Abandoned things are generally old. How can iron be rotten? Rusted, yes, but ...

Have you considered shading him? It may make him look a little more authentic, as he has rather strong features, such as his cheekbone structure, and shading may show these ...

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Hehe, made me smile. 7/10

lecture

Ah, one thing I always, Always tell myself- keep living. Things will change. And Never, Ever, let your past rule you. Learn your lessons and move on. Woo 16-dom XD

Actually, I quite like this. Though it's a bit short to actually comment much on... nevertheless, crit I promised, crit I shall. Bright, tawdry colors flashed past my uncaring eyes ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS. I'm sure you'll love it here- I do. You want to get stuff up quick? One tip- do 2 reviews for every story, poem, script or ...

**whoops. 0.0 Sorry!** Sarah blinked and recoiled. She slid back into her human form, shedding scales for skin. Her eyes stayed the same for a few seconds after shifting, but ...

Sarah hissed in fury. Her prey never got away. The element of surprise was gone now, and Sarah watched the jaguar warily. His paw could deliver a mighty blow, and ...

Nokie smiled brightly at Maddox. She seemed a lot happier, and Nokie was grateful. "Lassie?" He paused, his face more serious now, his tone sincere. "Yeah, Nokie?" "Thanks." "For what?" ...

Sarah sensed the morphing the second it happened. Morphing always consumed a lot of energy, sucking the heat from the environment. In her python form she could 'see' heat- a ...