Nutty

you know me... :lol: I'm not that old here myself so anyway good to meet you! (whispers) I think I scare people....

Man... to be separated from icecream... oh and your family too, I suppose :lol: It's great. When are you posting the next part? :wink:

fair enough with the stock-standered stuff, but this is only the beginning. I have plans so dont worry. And about the tears, I will re-write that. I really only meant ...

solitis will be explained later

dragons: large wise scary can fly beautiful intelligent Monkeys: Hairy They eat BUGS funny-looking Come on... BUGS??

I put part one one on as well for those who didn't read it originally.

"NO!" She grabbed the pot off the fire and flung the contents at the attacker. The man screamed, clawing at his face as the broth burned him. He panted with ...

I love the added bits. I often think about that kind of stuff... But then I think too much. we are munipulated... by advertising, peers, parents, school, the government....

Interesting storey... it's nice to see something from a different perspective. "jon looked at kyle when he didnt think jon was looking" makes no sense. did you mean when he ...

I have edited my story, with all comments in mind. Minor changes, all to do with wording and description. but hopefully it will make a difference. All tips will be ...

It's good. No doubt about that. But have you thought of keeping some of the details a mystery? I love books that only give you tantalizing tidbits about one thing ...

I don't like juice. It's too strong for me! apple juice is okay but moct orange juices are way to strong. Waters good (I drink a LOT of water) and ...

andy-is it? YOU should be giving ME tips! I want to know more... I love it. Great prologue. Make sure that the chapters themselves have lots of action. Philosophy has ...

dragons could sooo eat monkeys. They say that dragons are brutish, greedy stupid and evil. Dragons are, in my opinion, wise, and just want peace. How would you like it ...

yeah this is JUST the opening paragraph. You know... attack now, Explain later! I'm coming up with the next part so... all (well, most) will be explained. And yes, the ...