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Hiiii! Niiice, a fairy-tale twist. With a horror spin on it. I approves :D Anywho, Cons first! :( ...family: mother, Susan; father, David; and two twin children, Harry and Grace. ...

**edited. I made some changes and took into account the advice of the people that commented (I've posted a thank you down there so the previous three people's reviews are ...

:D HIIII. Uh, personally, I disagree with Pheonix on a few things (will explain below). Cons first! :( You mentioned the chai tea four times. The first two are okay, ...

Hiya! Cons first :( Awkward sentence structure. Try reading it out loud. Backstory in the beginning ruins it all. There's no mystery anymore and it diffuses the suspense. You basically ...

Hallo! I like Zelda, fun to play. Woot. Anyway, I'm not here to comment on if your story is too Zelda-y or not Zelda-y. I think you've got that figured ...

Yes, actually, I can. I was surprised, too, but my teacher's cool with it :) As long as it isn't all made up of profanity.

**edited. Well, I decided to make some changes. It's a little longer, and a little more detailed. I've put a comment on this to seperate the unedited version and the ...

Thanks Demeter! Oh, I guess I missed saying that stuff. I like to write fantasy, slice of life, and I used to write fanfiction (currently working on a realistic fiction ...

Hey, I feel kind of bad ConCrit'ing 'cause the comments before say they really like this, but you gotta do what you gotta do. I've got pros, too :D Cons: ...

Hiya! Cons first: Grammar errors - proofread! There are a few things that you repeat that 1) are redundant and 2) make it uninteresting. You mention that she hangs in ...

Hello! This my first review on this site! YAY! Anywho. Cons first, 'cause that's how I review. The first sentence was awkward. I understood what you meant, but the punctuality ...

Helloo! To say that I am an aspiring writer would be redundant. So, let's cut to the chase. I just joined this site half an hour ago and it looks ...