Nolan

If you’re looking for a fantastic adventure with magnificent creatures and wonderful knights in shining armor, then go away; you don’t belong here. On the other hand, if you’re looking ...

This was a powerful piece of poetry. It was splendid. Although, it did seem a bit choppy. And, a little too rough. The choppiness kinda took meaning from the poem. ...

I love the message you're trying to convey, It's wonderful. You just need to work on your flow. It seemed a bit choppy, which kind of detracted from the overall ...

Those are great ideas, thanks. :D One to add though is eating candy. It always does it for me. Especially Reese's Pieces. That, and listening to Tom Waits. :D

A death in the dungeon, And all goes silent. On the floor lies the bludgeon, And the air smells violent. A vicious mauling Of the victims' son; A child crawling ...

Overall, this is a very good poem, but quite a few errors were made. You did something I used to always do in this verse. You sacrificed the flow and ...

This is a magnificent poem. It flowed very well, and the syllabic nuances in it were great. They definitely added to its value. You turned many phrases in it the ...

I absolutely love your theme, and, overall, your poem. You just made a few mistakes. It doesn't really flow, work on that a bit. Try to start matching that syllable ...

A character study of sorts. Extremely perverted, and, in my opinion, pretty shitty. Knock. Knock. Knock. Knock. Knock. Knock. “Hold your goddamn panties! I’m coming,” he shouted. “Fuck off, as

This poem is...intriguing. I love it's format. And the word usage. But, it's too unanswered. It almost seems incomplete. Almost no flow to it. Next time, try more to complete ...

Wow. This was acceptable. Not great. Not terrible. Acceptable. Don't answer your own questions, it's just annoying. Leave more for the reader to interpret, and less of a mandate. Multiple ...

This was an okay piece of writing. I agree with the others. This is less of a story and more of a summary and/or prelude to a story. You've got ...

This was wonderful. I could see the imagery in my head, I love the vividness of the words you used. Also, the short sentences really, really, really accentuated this piece. ...

Thanks, to all of you. I love the criticism. :D Jack Frost: I love your quote. Tom Waits is the man.

I have come to realize that, in this day and age, almost every person you meet wants some of the same things, and makes aforementioned "things" the sole object of ...