Nolan

Wow. I get being lazy, but seriously? PAR-A-GRAPHS! Not to mention spell check and grammar check. Have somebody proof read your work-they'll have nitpicks you won't. And, in case you ...

I don't have time to read your story right now, but I will later. I just wanted to say that you may want to watch your names. ZaShwan sounds like ...

I dig indoor plumbing and refrigerated food and beverages way too much. It'd be neat, though.

I can really dig this. It jives well, and it's got great flow and rhythm. About the only thing i can think of to critique is that you should take ...

Name: Sal "Doc" Livvis Age: 16 (Senior/12th Grade-He skipped grades 1 and 2) Appearance: A massive teen, Doc stands at 6'8" tall. He is massively muscular, with a protruding chest ...

The silence of a generation, Cut off by the nation Of pain, love, and hurt, Rings for miles without once Meeting an ear- Never stopping to say Hello, good-bye, I ...

I can’t stand all this lying. I can’t stand all this blame. I’ve already started my dying, Ash and I will soon be the same. I can’t live much longer, ...

i really liked the plot. :D the biggest problem with it was that it had very awkward sentences and phrases. Sometimes they were too short, others were run-ons, etc. Plus, ...

If I die tomorrow, Will the memories fade to gray? Will all of this confusion Ever have something to say? If I die tomorrow, I hope you know just one ...

This whole storyline/idea is pretty good, but it's less of a poem and more of an "it" or a "thing," and less of a poem. You might try rewriting the ...

This is a free-verse poem I wrote for my English 2H class. It was supposed to be a horror, but I'm not extremely good with those, so I did my ...

this is really powerful, but seems like it'd be more of a short story. try italicizing "his" thoughts, it'll make it more readable. also, there were some punctuation/capitalization/grammar errors. i'd

We share so many things, You and I: Hatred and fear, pain and angst. But, there is one Thing that sets me Apart from you. One small thing, That, if ...

Oh, what happened To the love we used to share? It makes me so saddened When it's only your name I hear. Oh, look at me now, The man who ...

you can't delete anything if it's been replied to. about the only thing you can do it erase your text and lock the thread. :\