Nightshade

Hi River, nice poem. I really liked the staccato, forceful rhythm that this was written with. It did a good job of emphasizing and enhancing the content. I also particularly ...

This is a refreshingly original love poem. It's always an accomplishment to write something like this without falling into cliche, and you've done it perfectly. I particularly enjoyed the line: ...

I've always loved acrostics even though they're looked down on by the majority of the literary world :) This poem isn't particularly earth-shaking, but I don't think it was meant ...

I agree with all of Quibbler's points. If you want this piece to stand out among the millions of musings about love being a puzzle, you'll need to work really ...

This is a very well done poem. Your word choice is excellent and I loved the idea of the descending list of flaws. The rhythm and flow you have here ...

I wasn't able to pull much out of this poem. There are just too many unknowns to really understand what's going on. Who is "you"? Who is the narrator? Why ...

I liked this a lot. The writing does a great job of conveying emotion, and there are a lot of unique images and descriptions in here. Like writewatiwant, I felt ...

I enjoyed this. I've always loved forest imagery, and you do a good job of painting a picture with your words. I was somewhat disappointed with the last three lines ...

This story has continued to hold my interest. There are some subtle things in this chapter that I really appreciated. The transition between the old man being mysterious and and ...

Thank you for the reviews. Now that I've looked back at it, I completely agree with the comments on the woman's story. It was an attempt to make her seem ...

Hi Ben, welcome to YWS. I would suggest trying this poem without a rhyme scheme. While reading it, I frequently got the impression that you were focused more on rhyming ...

You have a good idea here, but this poem didn't do it for me. Your enjambment didn't seem to serve a purpose and ended up making the poem choppy to ...

You are quite talented with description. Your writing allows the reader to completely visualize everything that is happening. I particularly liked how you described the night itself as being bruised. ...

I walk past the park where children laugh and take my leave from the city street. With my face and hands buried in my coat, I can't help but wonder ...

You have some really interesting ideas and images in here. The sorrowful umbrella and waterfall of crystals really stood out to me as being unique. The last line's wording felt ...