Nightlyowl

Wow you take great pictures. I love them all. Keep taking them, they're awsome.

I know you want feedback on your characters, not your plot so I would like to point out that 6 feet tall isn't all that towering to a girl around ...

I agree to some degree with Drawer. I think it was good but I do get where she's coming from. I didn't find it confusing though. But I guess you ...

A vast, black abyss of endless proportion where everything fell, but it did not fall down, up, nor any other direction for even these did yet not exist . You ...

I really loved your story. I'd love to hear more of it when you write more. I only found a few typoes. So if I were you I'd reread it ...

I really do like that. I like how you incorporated the cowboys into the story. I always did like cowboys and any story with them. There was just one typo ...

Wow I loved it. The only thing I have to say about it is this: I search for him as the burns on my skin closing up. closing should be ...

Ok, I just have a few comments. “Hey mum.” Jenny picked up the phone. The person who called Jenny was her mum. You don't have to say that because when ...

Wow that's really good. Though I find that you use the word 'nor', in 2007 I don't think people would actually use that word in sentences anymore, but it gives ...

I liked it a lot. I understand where Audy is coming from with the grammatical errors, and the thing about the pencil can't feel frustration, but I think that if ...

Chapter 1: Motel 66 was a trashy, run down place. There were prostitutes working in some of the rooms, while druggies were getting high in others. A rusty, old playground ...