Nightfall

Well, this is super cute! The end was really unexpected (which is good) and the parts in between really fleshed it out. Great stuff! Oh, and when you said Her ...

First of all, superdy duper congrats on the rhyming, because it seems like all anyone will write these days is freeform, so it's good you jumped out of the box. ...

I FREAKIN' LOVE THIS POEM!!!!!!!!!! ^-^ Look at all the people making fun of it! >____< It rocks & rolls!

Ah! This is most excellent! I like the subtle hinting of the dark past, and the way both your character and the character of the one that watches really shines. ...

I think this poem pretty much rules! Sure, there are the fixing of the excessive repetition, but still, a little editing magic and it will be stupendous! This one's definitely ...

Okay, Jared.... that was kind of uncalled for. It is a poem, and it's a pretty good representation of feelings and emotions and all the sorts of things that people ...

Well, guys.... it's not really a prophecy that is incorporated into any stories of mine.... yet. I'm not sure I will, with the no-promises deal, but hey, that's cool that ...

I agree that it sounds like a prophecy that's part of a fantasy novel. If that's the effect you were going for, then it's great. The rhyme scheme flows pretty ...

Now listen very closely to the things that I will say For the sky is sort of silky, smooth; a silent loving grey, The perfect time for telling all the ...

Okay, first of all, this IS a poem. Yes. And that person is a jerk. I liked it! It was really good, but sometimes your rhythm was off. But for ...

Your poem's really cool! It's really personal and tells a great story. It's really touching and, well.... poetic! It's pretty and intricate and I like the fact that there's a ...

This poem was soooo cute! It was sad, but had a great hope to it that really made it inspirational and totally adorable. Your topic was really riveting and I ...

WOW! This poem was extra-special awesome!!! You need punctuation! POETRY NEEDS PUNCTUATION!!!! Okay, I'm kidding. Poetry is interperative, and therefore has no real need for anything specific. As long

The night was quite bold And was filled with an air Of the dark and the cold That had always been there. I looked with my eyes Quite unclouded by ...

This poem was pretty much excellent. I love your Styx and Hades references, and the use of the Lily. It was really inspiring the way the Lily could resist the ...