Niamh

This was very nicely written, but I have a few suggestions: frankly, it was too damn hard. In a narrative as beautifully written as this, there is little need for ...

This is a great topic. I listen to music to get me into the right mood to write. Sometimes I place a song with a particular scene. It really does ...

Thanks to both of you. I appreciate your encouragment.

An overly taught piece of night What a great description. This is so original, which is always wonderful to see. It definitely stands out among descriptive pieces. Good job, you ...

Thanks, MH. Yeah, I recieved those comments. I've been hesitant to post more for lack of comments, but here is chapter 2 (I have half of this story written already, ...

Wow--this really encapsulates the feeling of a dream--uncomfortably familiar and unnatural. I liked it. It's very different from anything else currently posted, which is a good thing. Strawberry blond

I loved this. It was so simple and earnest, but felt like something any writer could relate to. As I read, I kept choosing favorite parts, but there were too ...

This is a wonderful sonnet. The rhyming is perfect, because it does not sound forced, and the words flow very easily, as if it was meant to be read aloud. ...

9/10. Interesting and appropriate to this site.

"Yes, within the bilge of the ship during my transportation to Barbados, the water rose quite high." -Sadhbh McCann --- Is freedom connected to peace?

But of course, she thought to herself His weakness was his devotion So she gave to him a vision Filled with horror and false notion Above all, the Flame desired ...

Thank you so much! That was a good explanation. I was pretty sure I knew what inverted syntax meant, but I just wanted to make sure. I really appreciate such ...

Such stunning imagery--this poem is almost perfect. The only thing I can suggest is taking out "you turned me into a liar" and leaving it as " . . . ...

Why isn't this already published? It's perfect. I wish I could find something to correct--I can't. The character development is discretely in depth, if that makes sense. You understand who ...

This is a brilliant character sketch. It's inspired me to try a character sketch myself. I liked the dialogue--I didn't find it hard to read. I also liked the names--unrelated ...