Niamh

This is very good. It was very interesting, and the tone of your writing and dialogue perfectly fit the time period--it was all very formal. Perhaps the repition was on ...

This has a lot of potential. You definitely have a good start, but there is room for improvement. I hope my suggestions can help you: The snow still fell after ...

Great imagery--I know you've heard that already--but that's a good thing. I love the last stanza. This isn't usually the kind of poem that would intrigue me, but I think ...

I'm a potato famine book myself. J/K. I looove the history of the famine. I'm actually writing a story about it too, but it's been on hold lately. For books, ...

I agree as well. I always start my stories with plotting, so I have a basic layout to follow, and then whatever comes to mind can be incorporated to fit ...

That made me laugh. A good essay--I'm just wondering what your teacher thought of it.

That's good advice, from both of you. I hope I can utilize it as well. :)

This is reminiscent of a book on the evolution of philosophy I was reading. I really liked this. No corrections, really. This is a good poem.

Thanks for taking time to crit this in the first place. It's very helpful. I understand about detail dumping. What do you think I could do to improve that? It's ...

It seems your outlook mirrors my own. Materialism bothers me. Unfortunately, it is the basis on which most high school students revolve around. Who cares about the environment when we ...

Those are amazing! I collect replicas myself (well, I've started, I only have two) but having the actual pieces from the time periods would be astounding! That's very lucky that ...

This is a perfect ode to the Glass Menagerie. I have to say I hated that play, but I love your poem.

Chapter Three This could definitely use some work. Chapter 3 This could definitely use some work, namely in the dialogue. The first light on the fourth day revealed what Cahira ...

This is a very good story, with perfect imagery, and even better portrayal of Anthony's emotions. But you asked for a critique of your dialogue, and the only comment I ...

What is good about this story is that you say it is a fantasy, but it begins with much more substance than a few dragons and magic wands. We get ...