NeutronStar

Thanks, I'll do a bit of rewording. :D

Thanks for that. :)

Ha, thanks! :wink:

Thanks! :D

Thanks! :D I did wonder about the last sentence, and at first I did put 'standing' but then I changed it to 'stood'. I don't know, but I reckon this ...

Wow, thanks, all of you. :) And Stella, I do agree with you - I don't much like the 'thirteen years later' thing, either, but I dislike it even more ...

Ok, thanks. I might edit it a bit later. Chapter 2 is posted, if you'd like to read. :)

That is really, really good! I may suggest that you use a different rhyme than 'thee', but even so, it's very fluent. Excellent! :D

I'll write some more after I've done some reviews and sorted out all those mistakes. Perhaps the mistakes are down to me watching the TV at the time I was ...