NeutronStar

I'll write some more after I've done some reviews and sorted out all those mistakes. Perhaps the mistakes are down to me watching the TV at the time I was ...

Hi, this is my first piece of work I've submitted. It's an idea I've had for a while, but never put into practice. I hope you enjoy it. Chapter 1 ...

Very good, I think! Your description and grammar is great, though I did notice this: "Rapunzel," she carefully , "you know Gothella would half kill you if you even tried ...

Chapter One: Willowing trees framed the moss-licked pathway. "It's as beautiful as I imagined." " C'mon, Zander , help me get some stuff." The smell of lavender and pine met ...

Very interesting, but rather sudden. Maybe elaborate more on her mother's death, but the description and the way you get into the heart of the character is very good. The ...