Nephthys

Alright, I honestly and completely read the story, and I still think that you need to read more. If you ask any writer what you can do as a young ...

Sometimes though, the sun shines through, and I swear that I see you. You must be happy there, engulfed by the golden rays of the sun, never feeling cold or ...

I think you really need to read more. I honestly didn't really read this. Your grammar and spelling need serious work, but more importantly you show absolutely no knowledge of ...

When it comes to the sudden, no one can expect it. Duh?.... There is no defense against it. It usually defies all logic, and does not fit with the world. ...

I think this story is a little confusing. I feel like most of your dialogue is extremely inverted. Ex: "Why would I joke about such a serious matter as this ...

Thank you both very much for the excellent advice :) I've gotten the comment about Prussia from someone else, too, so I think I should probably make it a little ...

Maybe try writing about how Shakespeare took most of his plots and ideas from pre-existing stories (Folk tales, poems, songs, historical situations etc). You could also look at some of ...

Could you please review my story? It's science fiction and 1200 words Thanks :)

First of all, PLEASE organize your work into paragraphs. No one wants to read a big block of text. Also, this seems way too short to be a complete scene. ...

Could you please review this for me? It's Science Fiction and 1200 words. Thanks very much :)

Could you review my story? It's Science Fiction, and 1200 words Thanks :)

Cleona turned around quickly when she heard voices coming from a room in the hallway. Not a a great opening line. It's not particularly smooth or interesting. She walked with ...

Ok. So here’s the deal. I was born VERY informal. It makes me want to stop reading the story right now. Also, be very wary of first person. I find ...

Felix Van Doren was having a good day. He’d successfully tailed his mark up Downwards Street, down a couple alleys and made a note of the house she’d gone into ...

I agree with a lot of those things! Finding good vampire books is hard to do! However, I don't think the genre is dead. I think in the hands of ...