Nephthys

I was running after her on a dark street of God knows where I'm not really sure what you're trying to say with the last part. I would cut "of ...

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it was the latest fashion in the 1800's I'd cut out the "in the 1800s". Your reader will get that from the rest of the story. Right off the start, ...

Despite what many of her employees might say about her, Allegra did not enjoy murder at all. It was a very unpleasant crime, but necessary in her line of work. ...

I turned back and waved as the jeep drove off into the distance, before looking at my brother who had his eyes set on the complex in the distance. This ...

I like that you're telling us things about the main character, but instead of focusing on the history of her life in the first chapter, maybe try telling us one ...

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Sorry it took so long to get this review done, the reading took a while. Oh my goodness I like this story! :) Historical fiction about war is not usually ...

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I hurried into the bathroom and looked at my reflection in the mirror. Phew, I was the same old me again. My long reddish hair was a mess, and I ...

Could you please review my story? It's science fiction and 1200 words. Thanks :)

Could you please review my story? Title: The Inspection Genre: Science Fiction Length: 1200 words Link: Thanks :)

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I bent down over a sink in a bathroom I’ve never been into. I like this opening line :) Good start! the dim light didn’t seem to make the room ...

If I think that your piece needs some work, I won't be afraid to let you know. I can be a little harsh, but what do I know anyway? :) ...