Nephthys

PART 3! :) INT. THE STROM FAMILY HOME. DAY. GWENDOLYN comes through the front door and removes her outerwear. BESSIE trundles towards her and attacks her with a hug. BESSIE ...

PART 3 :) AXEL is storming storms out of the village in a angrily AXEL: Father has no right to disdain me from my friends, no right at all I ...

Part 3 :) They enter the hut, For shooting purposes, it is important to include every character in each shot. Instead of "they" put AXEL, NADIA and GRETEL. While this ...

Alright - Part 2! The night sky sits beautifully on top of a row of hills, dimly lit by the stars. I like this. AXEL and GRETEL exit from the ...

A screenplay, lovely :) I think this should go in the Scripts forum though. Also, this is WAY too much to review in one sitting, so I'm going to review ...

I certainly agree with your idea that a character should not be considered a Mary Sue just because they have one Sue characteristic. However, so does the creator of the ...

PART 2: INT. A FAMILY HOME. NIGHT. The kitchen of the most normal family in the world. Warm, friendly. GWENDOLYN removes a tray of potatoes from the oven, and arranges ...

I would love a review for my script, Freya's Replacement. It's a sci-fi/fantasy TV show that I'm working on. Here is a link :) Thanks!

Bump...?

Yay! Screenplays! First of all, thanks for using the screenplay format. It makes it so much easier to read/understand. A bright room that looks like a stereotypical interrogation room with ...

This is the pilot of a TV show I'm working on about Norse Mythology. Let me know what you think. Please, please, PLEASE feel free to rip it to shreds ...

Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be your reviewer today. The lights are dim and flickering due to a recent power outage . You don't need that bit. NATHAN: Lighten ...

PART 4 EXT. TANGIN MANOR GARDENS - DAY. THE DOCTOR, VANCE and EUDORA run into the gardens. Eudora and Vance are extremely out of breath. EUDORA (In between breaths) You're ...

Thanks very much for the helpful suggestions! A couple of the things that you mentioned should explain themselves away in future parts, but I can see that I have a ...

Thanks for the feedback :) I noticed a problem with continuity in part 4, but it should be done soon.