Nephthys

This is quite long, so I can't do an in-depth critique. I really like the tone of this piece. I found it interesting (if a bit long), and I enjoyed ...

This is Part 1 of the Late Mr. Irving. It's supposed to be incredibly campy. You have been warned. As the show is a musical, the singing is in italics. ...

The best book I have ever read! Ever. I got it from the library yesterday and I'm already finished it. It is one of those books that you can just ...

Taking a step closer to the edge I looked over the side. Clouds covered the massive expanse that I gazed into, I find this phrase awkward. covered and expanse don't ...

First of all, NEVER trash your own writing like that. You are setting yourself up for failure. If you notice problems in your work, use the EDIT button to fix ...

Although she didn't need it. Why would she need to be slapped? Haround him, hell swirled and burned Not really getting this. It seems too epic for the circumstances. "The ...

It's great to get such detailed constructive criticism! Originally, I wrote this piece for a reading day we were having in Writer's Craft. The drips were originally meant to be ...

First of all I was SO excited when I saw this. I'm currently writing a musical about Edgar Allan Poe (but it's a very different interpretation than yours), and it's ...

I won't address the punctuation, since that's already been done. As I walked down the stairs I was shocked to find myself faced with a field of roses, Meredith’s face ...

I'm glad that you like it :) I'm worried that it might be confusing to a reader who doesn't have any knowledge of Norse Mythology. I wrote this as a ...

1) The Picture of Dorian Gray - Oscar Wilde (Also every play he ever wrote, in particular An Ideal Husband) Words cannot express the love I feel for Oscar Wilde. ...

I disagree with Ktg17, I think you have way too much description. If you're writing this scene to be performed, you have got WAY too many stage directions. Nothing annoys ...

Drip. Drip. Drip. Friends. Equals. That’s what Odin had said so many years ago when they cut their palms and mixed their blood. Brothers. Drip. That was before. Before Balder ...

I was a little worried when I saw the title to this story, because I've read versions of this myth so many times! I was pleasantly surprised with your version. ...

The Vampire of Praile Marianna left the theatre, striding briskly across the road to the railway station, surrounded by her bodyguards. She stepped up and into her private railway car, ...