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  • The Adventures of Felix Van Doren Characters (In Order of Appearance): FELIX VAN DOREN: An employee of the mysterious institution known as the UnIncorporation. He likes to think of himself ...

    Mar 26, 2011

  • Scripts
    Re: Stay Tuned

    Yay! A script! :) Before I start of the review: I'm sure that you've been told this before, but generally it is better not to direct your own work, since ...

    Mar 15, 2011


  • I'm back! I'm very glad that my last review was helpful :) “Oh,” Ivy said innocently , skipping to open the door. The combination of "said" and an adverb sometimes ...

    Mar 9, 2011


  • Hello, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely story today! :) The silhouetted shape was the only thing moving in the calm of the night. It crouched low ...

    Mar 8, 2011

  • Fantasy Novels
    Re: Snap Chapter 1

    The pale yellow rays of the moon illuminate my skin as I sit upon the wall near my home. Lovely first sentence, except what kind of wall? Without any description ...

    Mar 8, 2011


  • Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely story today! :) The sun began to rise on an island in the middle of the Janenia Sea. The island ...

    Mar 8, 2011


  • This sounds AWESOME. I'm going through about the fourth major re-write on my screenplay Freya's Replacement (It is a 1 hour serial drama pilot), and I would LOVE an analysis ...

    Mar 8, 2011


  • Hello, I'm Nephthys and I am here to review your lovely story. :) Delanie groaned as she felt herself being shaken from her sleep. First of all, I can't help ...

    Mar 8, 2011


  • Here is a synopsis of episode 1: Gwendolyn Strom is a librarian living in Stockholm, Sweden with her aunt and uncle in 1950. Gwendolyn gets engaged to marry Noah Andersen, ...

    Mar 5, 2011


  • Hi, You didn't mention anything about scripts in your blurb, so I was wondering if you would consider reviewing one. If you are interested, here is a link to my ...

    Mar 5, 2011


  • Hello, I am back for part of my review! :) He yelps and lets go. ZIL takes ADINA's head in his arms and holds her steady so she cannot bite ...

    Mar 5, 2011


  • Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I am very excited to review your script today :) First of all, I would suggest leaving details such as "dully lit" (is that even a ...

    Mar 5, 2011


  • Hi, I would love if you could review my script Freya's Replacement . I have just massively edited it, and have not received any reviews on the edited version yet. ...

    Mar 4, 2011


  • INT. TOWN HALL - STAGE WINGS - NIGHT Thursday 16th December, 2010. Presentation night. ON SCREEN TITLE: Thursday, December 16th 2010 WOW. A screenplay about theatre that takes place on ...

    Jan 30, 2011


  • PART 8 INT. SESSRUMNIR. DAY. GWENDOLYN sits on the floor of the main domed room. LOKI is there too. LOKI I'm sure you realize that you're in a very delicate ...

    Dec 4, 2010


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