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Hiya VioletJune, So I have come to review your piece. I will have to agree with Emorykings and BondGirl007. This was extremely lengthy. I was going to quit at first, ...

Hello again, here to review your revised chp. 2 and comment and do some grammar work: I will delete some things and change others just for good flow. They will ...

So I am here, as promised, to review. i will have to agree with... well I don't remember who said it, but your grammar was so much better in this ...

So Solvalery, I have come to review your piece, as requested. First of all, I would like to say that I liked this way, way, way better than Chp. 2. ...

I liked the beginning ok, but towards the end, it grew boring and your grammar became really, just bad. First he made me trip, at least he's a gentleman and ...

Hello there jasminebells! Now your just like them Your stuck in Hell forever now, your never going to leave. All three of these "your"s should really be "you're" as in ...

Again, I want brutal honesty. And now I am in full-on freak out mode. It’s not until after Max hangs up that I realize that I’m gripping the phone so ...

Hiya kingolions, So I feel like this whole poem challenged me to find something wrong with it. The whole time you were talking about someone being critical of your writing ...

Alright, so this was nice. It had a lot of emotion built up behind it which made it seem real (good thing), but some of the rhyming seemed forced. (bad ...

So, I was going back looking through all my old reviews, clicking on the links and seeing if the authors had added more. When I saw you wrote more I ...

So, here I am, having waded through your lengthy story. Umm, so I am brutally honest, please do not have your feelings hurt by the torrent of corrections that will ...

Known for being herself and doing everything to the extreme. None of this boring half-way crap you see nowadays.

I want brutal honesty! Candy-coat nothing, my dear reviewers!! The phone rings for the umpteen-thousandth time that day. I pick it up; knowing it will be Max. “What do you ...

So I am back again. I actually did read Chapter Five, but I didn't really have much to say. I like this better than the last chapter. The character is ...

Here I am again. Reading your story and what not... Anyways. I liked this entry too. The only thing I caught was a run-on sentence: The nurses fed us pills ...