Narnialover4ever1

Very good! I enjoyed this a lot!! The first part was really good :D

Ooh great part!! My favorite was probably this... ' 'My heart pounded in my chest to an ever increasing beat. Everything was pitch black, but far from silent. Terrible roaring ...

This is very sweet! I love it! Great job!! :D

I like it... it's different from what I've seen on here. Good job :) The first line was great!

I really like it! It was deep and fun to read :) keep up the good work :D

I dont usually like slashes but this one was good! I love Xmen!

This is very interesting! Keep up the great work!!! Vanessa is so great! :D

Some grammar problems but your doing great!! Keep up the good work :D

Great third chapter! Your characters are great! IcyFlame kinda said all the things I was going to say :) keep writing :D

Good job! I LOVE it so far! The title was very eye catching!

Very good! I like it! :D

This is great so far!! :D Keep writing!!

:D I love it so far! Great job!! :D

I LOVE it so far! Great job! Keep writing!!

I can not wait to read more!! Keep it up!!! :D