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Yuck- this kind of amazing, vivid description is the kind of thing that would make me reluctant to drink, in fear of a gruesome hangover like this! I love how ...

Damn- I didn't notice that. Thanks, I will make amendments.

I remember this poem! Ahem. I really like it- it's really smooth and easy to read; actually quite beautiful how the structure is lay out. The rhyme scheme is great ...

“Can you reach it?” Colin stretched and contorted his arms and hands towards his back. The rope cut into his wrists, rubbing them near-raw. His fingers brushed the top of ...

Colin woke from the nightmare with perspiration dripping down every inch of his body. The dream had caused a restless sleep even under heavy sedation, and, with the physical appearance ...

Thanks- my allegiance really lies with story telling in prose; this was simply scribbled for an English assignment, but your words are both helpful and encouraging. :)

I am writing a novel, but I felt obliged to click the Pat Buchanan option.

Woah, man, this was werid- and I like it! Luckily I was eating a bowl of Weetabix and milk, otherwise I would have been parched, old bean! Your description of ...

I really like this- as a rule I don't really like fanfiction, but you've done some seriously good stuff with this piece. The beginning is great- he's pissed off because ...

Thanks a lot, man. I agreed with you on the "and" front, a few of those would definitely make it smoother, thanks. :)

Clatter, clatter Gun shells hit the floor And gun bullets tear the air Screaming Ripping the wind and Distorting the breeze. Ten hit a soldier, An enemy, And betrayer. He ...

Teehee n00b! Have a follow, write some stuff and enjoy! Hope you get some nice comments on your writing!

This was great! A fantastic message given in a very humorous way, this made me smile a lot. My only nitpick: I think the line "What's worse?" breaks up the ...

This is actually really sad! It's so good that you can write sad, for want of a better word, stuff and still have the tone of a character's voice- this ...

This is REALLY good- great language and such and it really intrigues me. Are the BEEPs at the end an alarm clock- is this a dream? Great stuff. Just a ...