NaRachel

So apparently this is already a song...

Yay :) You wrote about something real this time :) It really shows, this song is complex and conflicted - like a real person. ( I'm not saying I don't ...

Yay :) You wrote about something real this time :) It really shows, this song is complex and conflicted - like a real person. ( I'm not saying I don't ...

(So this is about how beautiful it is when someone is really, really nice about breaking your heart- so nice it doesn't even hurt. I wrote this one a while ...

This one's a bit different... bit unsure about the chorus :/ You disrupted my breathing pattern so badly That now I breathe in fear like a drug And nothing this ...

I'm not a poet so any help - especially technical stuff- would be greatly appreciated (although I emphasises ANY help) :) Oh what I'd give to rewind the clock With ...

Hey :) I really, really like this, it was great- well done!!! :) The whole thing flowed really nicely and kept me interested until the very end, you kept it ...

Hi there :) First of all, good job! There were some really good images in here. There was a certain fragmented feel to this poem which I liked. I think ...

Hi :) Can I just say I know exactly how you feel reading back on old lyrics... haha sometimes I cringe at my own. But I think this is really ...

There were parts of this song that made me gasp with amazement because they were that good :) I think in songwriting it's okay to use cliches such as a ...

So i went really unconventional with my structure- is this ok????... :) Why do you feel the need to tear me up Into pieces so small Little parts of me ...

Hi :) this was good! First of all you've mispelled foolishness. I like the fact that you have to concentrate to get the meaning- you have a great way of ...

Just adding to that I absolutely.love the " do not you want to "

I thought I'd be a rebel and ignore the "18 plus" warning. This is really powerful and intense, well done... I mean it seriously, like it dirupted my breathing pattern ...

Hi :) I love the simplicity of this song, the short lines really worked! You should elaborate a bit and make it longer. Its not the most poetic piece but ...