NaRachel

Hi i'm Rachel. First of all i agree that writing stories is probably the best cure to boredom. I like that its short. Its just the two characters, the girl ...

Hey i think its good you posted something from the past. I think it was interesting, it sort of made your stomach squirm at the first line, but thats a ...

Its really long but I'll review the first bit for now. The beginning is really eye-catching you wonder what could of happened to this person if they can't remember their ...

HEY JUST PUT THE CHORDS IN IN CASE ANYONE IS REALLY BORED AND WANTS TO HEAR WHAT IT SOUNDS LIKE, I PLAY IT ON GUITAR. BY THE WAY THE CHORDS ...

Hey i think Romeo and Juliet love stories are always sweet take Love Story- Taylor Swift for example. Yeah it is a bit cliche but its almost so cliche that ...

Oh my gosh, :thud: this is sooo good! It's really exciting, couldn't take my eyes off the story. Can't wait to read on and see why the girl is taken ...

Hey i love that you've written a poem about the devastating Haiti. Theres a lot of words in it that i don't understand so its kind of hard to understand ...

I looked at the title and had to read because i like the song Red by daniel merriwater too. Its pretty short. The lyrics aren't anything deep and meaningful but ...

Thanks Ilovebubbles123 I admit i was starting to doubt my writing abilities and to hear your compliments made my day :)

hey i think its great. Its angry and its blunt and to the point. I think it risky having some of the lines not rhyming but i love the parts ...

SORRY ITS KIND OF LONG :) BLACK BIRD Verse1: His name is unmentionable not quite forgettable so i wont mention it to you His fame is quite regrettable not unexplainable ...

Hey i really like the beginning, its starts really abrubt which is exciting and interesting. I like the theme e.g magic, swords, elf's sure its a common theme but i ...

Hey i pretty much listened to what everyone had to say on the last chapters and then edited this one. Thanks for reading hope you enjoy:) DECISIONS, DECISIONS. Max was ...

Hey I like the whole storyline it seems like its going to be very interesting. I didn't like this part (Cassandra lives in California)! It would be better if you ...

I likey. Its good how you were so specific over what you were describing for e.g the warm coke and the converse bit. I agree with Demeter in that the ...