NaRachel

Hey, first of all I'm really excited for you as you are obviously proud of this piece. Second of all, I have no idea what you're talking about for the ...

Hey I admire your enthusiasm with posting so much, but just keep in mind that people aren't going to review all of them when you post so much :)

Wow the format of this is really interesting and exciting, mainly created by the short lines of rhyme! :) I really loved it! I have absolutely no criticisms, I especially ...

First of all, nice signature quote :) Okay the first problem I had with reading this is that it didn't rhyme enough... people like ryhmes, think about reading poems, I ...

Hey, I just reviewed your other piece "The Water", looks like you're really getting into the writing which is great! I liked this one better than you're other. I think ...

Hey :) I like the flow of this song, it works pretty well. Also the theme is good- admittedly its verging on cliche but I think thats okay.There were some ...

CAN YOU NOT DO AGE RESTRICTIONS ANYMORE OR AM I BEING IGNORANT? FOR ANYONE WHO WANTS TO BE WARNED THIS SONG CONTAINS THE F WORD :) And my heart is ...

Thanks, you're right it is confusing :)

Okay :) I think some sentences are just a little too simple and obvious. For example : I'm all that is left of the Jordan family . Try not to ...

Aww its kinda cute. You're right, technically speaking its not the greatest poem but its alright. You can tell its written by someone young because of the cliche opinion of ...

Oooooh, interesting... I like it! I know War is a pretty common theme but I still like it. I love its ambiguity; it kind of flashes in and out if ...

Wow, this is great!!! :) The opening line is brilliant and really gets the reader excited for the rest of the poem. I love this part I woke this morning ...

Wow. This is pretty different, in terms of format it doesn't follow the usual songwriting "rules", however unconventionality isn't a sin but a blessing when it works and I think ...

Hey :) I just wrote a very large reply to this piece and it didn't send properly and therefore was deleted :( Soooo, I'm going to summarise. Basically what I ...

In days of cold, fields of snow die the old, while young will grow Spring will come, kill of the white The suns hum, brings back the light Come with ...