NYCnightowl007

I liked your use of words, yet they didn't seem to really flow. It would be great if you could distinguish between the verses and the chorus, as that would ...

I have absolutely no idea what this all means. But I liked it. It was quite, quite beautiful. It made me smile. Minds are dry, when hate is wet. What ...

Hey there. I really enjoyed this. I like how the first verse was normal and the chorus was dark. It makes a good contrast. Just like Black Night Werecat said, ...

thanks, though. :D

Henry, Joey, Laura AND Eleanor are main characters. Not just Eleanor. I just started out with her.

This is a little break from my usual stuff in the form of a short story. Hope you like it! ♥Chrissie Eleanor Stone was nearly jumping with joy as she ...

I added italics. It makes a lot more sense now. :)

Even though I liked it, I have some things that troubled me: I felt as though I were thrown too quickly into the plot and didn't have enough time to ...

The only thing I can hear is Charlie the beagle’s paws on the damp forest floor and my own feet crunching sticks as I walk. Through the thick tree trunks ...

Hey there! There were some things I had some trouble with: When the narrator says "this house needed mom badly", I didn't know what to think. I didn't think it ...

Hey there. I was struck by your use of words; for example: "I was decently drunk ...". I loved that. But it feels like you're really trying to point out ...