NLPrincess13

i know it's been said before, be careful with your punctuation !! i like the character and how you describe it with flowing over the paragraphs. there still something missing ...

it's very good, i like it very much keep going, i think you got very good potential here, everyone does other things than they suppose too. i write when i ...

Well done, Cairo i like the flow and its emotions was strong :D i admire the beginning "My life itself has become a chore, In which I'm forced to abandon ...

thanks guys for the positive reviews!!! :D

i like it very much, i enjoyed yes, it's a blessing . i truly love YWS! it's perfect place. i know i wasn't here much, but I'm doing my best ...

Setting up our guns we lie them to bed Using our weapons we made them all fall it stuck the flow, i got the meaning, but you can use better ...

Thanks, yeah i puzzle tenses sometimes.... I'll keep that n mind :D thanks for reviewing OxJazzy :D

i know, it's very old one and my first, I'll try my best next time :D thanks for reviewing

"A reconsidered notion" The blossomed heart slowly rise He used to hide his shape from the light Simply, to claim control on his side He committed that for a lifetime ...

I am with Crescent too! at first i thought he one of those boys then i realized, "Hmmmm, No" any way i love the hospital and sister parts..... very good ...

*raising my hat* :D i loved it, the paragraphs is rich and meaningful. i like it and i think i am going to read for C.S lewis! any way, well ...

i literally laughed cause you remind me of those teacher back in my year schools, Oh god such long time...:D any way it was amusing and lovely, i like it. ...

I like the flow very much, clearly the emotion is very Strong . but "For self-abuse, yeah. Morning often comes too soon." yeah!!! not in perfect place.... i mean you ...

Not your best, i felt the flow intended and lack much emotions............. the rhyme with "in" in each line didn't help the mood at all.... sorry it just my opinion... ...

very good, i guess "I'm not sure why I wrote this" is exactly why you write it! :D good job, Keep up update us with more pieces