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Re: “Sanctuary”
The silver moon shone his light to an endless infinite ride Shall the ride follow his guide For Swift dazzling time to the thousands of miles shall no clouds get ...
Nov 7, 2011 -
Re: Previous Mistakes
Nice Work! I like it a lot... the beat is fit well too! "My plan after school is to join the army But it seems like I can't, it's not ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Mercy (chapter 1)
Thank you all for your reviews, i'll try harder besides it's my first time to write a novel!!! thanks again
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Defensless or defeated
Ola to you NafeCT thanks for the review.... thanks for the idea it's totally considered cause i was tweaked at it too :D you actually made me smile, Big thank ...
Apr 30, 2011 -
Re: Don't Come To My Funeral
oh! Very Strong sensation there! i like the serenity you achieve with words to thrive the floe, even though the emotions is heavy! My favourite line: "They came to me ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: My Own Worst Enemy
i like it a lot! i think it's every one worst enemy! specially girls!!! i like your flow and the emotion there very strong!, nice poem you accomplished :D Favorite ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: Phantom Dad
it's very well!! wow it's so emotional, i love this piece than the last one! it's good,again very good.....i want to hear it now! can I? just small opinion. the ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Be Quick.
well! i can feel the emotion, and i can sense the flow too. i like it, but you can do some extra look in the last (ending)stanza to maintain the ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Just Joined
Welcome to YWS!! it's seems interesting"horror" ha? can't wait! update us with your work as often as you could :)
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: My sister's art
it's good tell your sister to keep up!! :D
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Silent Deceit
Ok, like cos', somethin......!!!! it supposed to be something, because! :D:D you know " when i was new member?!" they kept on saying about following the rules. sorry i get ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Goodbye
Now it's better, i can feel the flow rising, but the problem of it its length. you know! there were so perfect lines followed by other lines that you have ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Nonchlant
Nonchalant" Verse 1: As always you have been Careless, selfish and senseless Broke all the ways out of your ruses Cut people's heart and bruise them Pre chorus: I begged ...
Apr 27, 2011 -
Re: Time Forgot
looooooooove it :D i truly deeply madly like it. i love the flow in the verses, the chorus. i want to hear it Ox! it's really good one and i ...
Apr 27, 2011 -
Re: Silent Deceit
i like it, i guess it's a bit of rap! you didn't stick with the grammar and punctuation rules, it's the style of rap,right?! the flow of emotion clearly shows ...
Apr 27, 2011
