Myth

Shafter : Yay! My 'twin' who has picked up things I've disregarded. Thank you for spending time to look over the prologue, as I've said in my PM you can ...

I seem to have forgotten some parts of the earlier story, I'll go to reading it and if I find anything I'll point it out. :D

Who? ~Monessa I'm sure he'll have something interesting to say, I'm bored on my own. ~Brenna .: Would you say you're lazy?

I always use third person but for historical fiction I like to use first person, mainly because they are my shorter stories and you can get an impression of what ...

I love her hair and the staff(?) in her hand. But what is that face in the sky?

Hello Qamar! I'd love to see Dubai, what's it like ther, if you've ever been there. Good to see you already have a friend on the site. :D

I usually go for symbolism, it doesn't always work for others, but I love it. Get the reader to become familiar with the setting/world, a common fair can be turned ...

This is like being in school all over again XD

Is that meant to be a joke? I jumped a bridge once, I'm still alive so I guess it is like an 'afterlife'. ~Aethel .: Can you climb trees?

Not done this for ages but I'll give it a go. * Name : Simin Personality : --Depending on a situation she can be a pessimist or an optimist --Has ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Its fur was reddish-brown, its four paws and brushy tail-tip black as if they had been dipped in paint. Was ...

Tech what? Sorry, I don't use all those human contraptions. ~Monessa I understand most things. How else can I repair 'matons? ~Aethel .: Do you swear?

"I want that kitty! No, I have to get that one. I want 'em all!" What would you say if a giant hand appeared out of the clouds?

No. Though it is quite like Time Events. ~Monessa *snorts* That 20C nonsense? No. ~Aethel .: If you could/had to change your name, what would it be?

Frabjous Imp : Your suggestion makes sense, mine confuses me too XD Thank you ever so much for reading :mrgreen: *bows a couple of times* Changes have been made, hopefully ...