Myth

Only thing I can comment on is the repetition of ‘her’: The wind lifted her hair from her shoulders and it waved in front of her , whipping in her ...

Ask Paron because I have no idea. ~Aethel .: What's the most disgusting food you've ever eaten?

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * There were so few clouds out that day ... that he felt a little annoyed with it all. Uh – ...

I love how you manage to get each characters voice right, and Samantha correcting her mistakes. Pap reminds me of Lennie from Steinbeck's Of Mice and Men , I think ...

Name : Aethel Gender : Female Age : 24 Hair colour/length : Dark, short and uneven Eye colour : Blue Skin colour : Tan Personality : Gets along fine with ...

Mr Green : Thank you for reading. I'm actually writing the chapter where this takes place, since posting I've decided to include it in. I'll be posting the first parts ...

Very nice, I like the blue-ness of it all. And the pointed finger reminds me of ET.

Hello Wars! I'm Myth. I love reading and writing fantasy, historical and sci-fi. See you around the site :mrgreen:

I have no family. Well - would you call 'matons family? I guess I'm the same with everyone. ~Aethel .: Do you find it hard to lie to friends/family?

Welcome Mike! I'm Myth. I love fantasy, historical and sci-fi. Would love to see what you come up with. See you around the site :mrgreen:

Hello! Welcome to the site. I'm Myth, always around here somewhere. If you have any question let me know. See you!

Plenty of typos in there and a few sentences that you didn't really complete such as: Jacob came over to me and lifted my. I think I've said this before, ...

Clau : I was tired, it was nearly 4pm GMT time XD

God. ~Aethel Meeting my parents. ~Monessa .: Are you religious?

"Hello," "What? What in Day's—" "Don't bring your Goddess into this, Dill." Aethel, smiling so that her scar wrinkled, nodded to Prenga. "I've waited so long for this. Do you ...