Myth

(Nice idea) *** Dear Doe, I've been wondering when you're going to get a move on in my story, I'm fed up of waiting for the dreadful Gathering, and I ...

I've edited this and changed a few things if anyone wants to add comments you are welcome to. :D

You write very well for someone that young, I certainly counldn't have written like that at your age. There is one sentence that I didn't really understand: Then the fair ...

You've been giving me these looks That no one has gave me before That just seemed wrong, I have two suggestions for that line: One You've been giving me these ...

YWS is the best, it's the only writing site I've join and I can't bother to join another site.

(Oh, sorry, I'll just go fix it. And can our characters be in different places and then meet up along the way as I want my character to start somewhere ...

Wow, that's really good, and kind of scary. :D

Thanks for the review, I'll be editing the whole story from the very beginning (which isn't posted here).

Yeah.. sure XD I have to admit, now that I'm thinking about it, it does look a little bit like a seal.. :D

Thank you Nate for making this great site, it's nice to know how much people really appreciate you for putting so much into the site.

I don't know, but my friend drowned in a river and it was my fault, so I suppose I did. ~ Jason. If you had the chance to change one ...

There's a shop in our street that sells all things middle-eastern so I'll ask if they had the chocolate. My sister absolutely LOVES Israeli grapes, she's always eating them. XD

Hey, that's a pretty good blend, it's just the colours that kind of ruin it. I'd go for a colour taken from any of the pictures you used and merge ...

This is me at Nimrod's fortress in Israel. This is me with the guy who proposed to me...somewhere. I don't remember where we are, but it's somewhere in Israel. :-) ...

(Under Major Rewrite)