Myth

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I crouched low to the ground, my back brushing against the wall. I forced myself to breathe, stay calm, and ...

Most humans. I really... don't like them. On the other hand I avoid most mages, too. Basically I avoid talking to most people. ~Monessa Are you a leader-type person?

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So I wanted to know, what are angels for you? I think angels are there to watch over people. Even if they can't help the person I believe they can ...

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Hi, As you've critiqued my work I'm returning the favour with, what i hope, is a helpful critique. Green = Comment/Correct Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Seagulls are ...

Interesting foreword. I’m not much of a poetry critic but the poem used short details to describe the events without being longwinded. It had an air of Tolkien-ism about it.

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Outside, a cool breeze entered her window and she tried to settle into a state of drowsiness but her mind resisted, a lifetime ...

Green = Comment/Corrections Black = Review * ‘We don’t like to admit it, but we are trapped by it,’ he thought. Try keeping thought in italics. He remembered how his ...

Great tips, Snoink. If I find even one single needless word, it's out. Gone. Disappeared. Deleted. Sent away. Whatever. If it's not strong enough, I change it. If it's too ...

These are my favourites which I've snagged. I adore Sharpe *drools* :P

I would tell no one. But if I really needed for someone to share the burden I would tell Mr Tull or my Oracle, Selene. Though sometimes I hate to ...

I see what you mean. Sometimes you get people who want descriptions of characters so I just it it a bit. I think I'll take your suggestion and move it ...

Hey there Jak! Welcome to the site. I'm Myth. You've already commented on my work so thanks a bunch! As for writing - no one is perfect, there will always ...

I hope you're better Ari! :D I would choose to go to school. I hate missing out on classes, especially when new work is given out. I also wanted perfect ...