Myth

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * "Why then you must hurry, don't be late for supper. Oh, and be careful of those trouble makers on the other side of ...

Hello there! I don't usually critique RF but I hope to be of some help. * Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Candy Ville is a normaltown A space ...

* Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * To buy my time, I simply took another bite of my oatmeal and sipped my orange juice. My insides were burning. .... ...

Accent

To be honest I critiqued this before and I had no idea who this character was and I would have suggested changes but the author didn't reply to any critiques ...

Ah, boasting about getting into heaven. Isn't that sinful? I love learning about all religions but it is a pity no one else in my class took the lesson seriously ...

Where does Aero say he could write better than the writer? He was critiquing to help out as best he could.

No and I wouldn't want to. ~ Monessa Have you ever hurt anyone because of their race, religion, sexulaity, etc?

Welcome Rikki! I hated being grounded but as I'm older it doesn't happen anymore. :D See you around.

Thanks Brad, RS and Bob! :mrgreen: You have pointed out things I was wondering about and a few others I hadn't yet thought of. Things like, say, tiny earpieces having ...

As a mage I'm not supposed to know who my parents were/are. But I have frequent Time Events where I see my parents, though their faces are covered I believe ...

Myth, I haven't bothered you in a while. My birthday is coming up, you know, the one where I Initiated. That was years ago for me but for you it ...

Is that the US version of Strictly Come Dancing?

Is this a prologue? I usually don't like prolgues but this was interesting with all the 'We' and I got the feeling this was many people speaking one after the ...

This reminds me of the time I was afraid of the dark. The first paragraph drew my attention and from there I couldn't avert my eyes, I just had to ...