Myth

I do. Especially when there is enough to make snowmen and other sculptures. ~Brenna .: Are a leader or a follower?

Ah, now I see. I was wondering where Welcome had learnt all his skills (that's who you were talking about, right?) and didn't know what to comment on that part ...

I've almost finished Chapter 2, I think I'll crack onto it tommorow.

I've never had to but I don't have a gun to start with. ~Brenna .: Are you drunk?

It was really the beginning that drew me in. In one sentence you managed to fit in what the short was about, and I could tell from the start the ...

Not really. ~Brenna .: What is the worst possible situation you could get yourself into?

Bound For Glory -- Jessica Bruce Rather long but I'll have the critique up, I promise. :D

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Felix looses a lover, the clan looses a leader. You've spelt 'loses' wrong in the description. The mountainside echoed with ...

No, I like it. But I would like to have a middle name. ~Brenna .: Are you confident?

Comments/Corrections I use green for comments and corrections--spelling mistakes,questions and things I liked/disliked. Suggestion Sometimes I come across sentences that are hard to swallow or can be

Myth, If you have an idea then I say you ought to stick with it. I'm getting bored of Vana, he annoys me and when did he get a tattoo? ...

Cold. Horrible. ~Brenna .: Are you/do you know a spoilt brat?

I won't say. Vana'll figure out my plans. ~Brenna .: Are you/do you know a spoilt brat?

Sam : Thank you for reading and your comments! The main thing, in my opinion, would just be to explain the characters' relations to one another. I think you missed ...

Poor Rufus. Ari, you got the character of Lucia out with the dialogue even though there was not much to describe what she actually felt towards her baby brother. And ...