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Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Before I forget, you should rate this (PG-13 or R). He had requested [s]that he was[/s] to be stationed t ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Today was Saturday, but Sangha came to work today, anyways . ‘anyways’ = anyway Camilla led Makata to the Viewing ...

Word : Beep Count : 100 .: The girl, standing at the corner of the James’ Street, checked her watch for the third time. She had been waiting an hour ...

Granted. But then you disappoint the nice people who were going to welcome you to their neighbourhood! I wish my characters would be nice to me for a change!

I did once, not anymore. But I guess Willov is a close friend. ~Brenna No, if they get too close I'll only lose them. ~Monessa .: Would you call yourself ...

RR, that all depends. Does the prologue tell a story? If it isn't important to the rest of your novel/story then you should take it out. I usually go for ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * On November 17, 9999 young Simon Baxter rode home on the hover bus. In his seat television he watched bioball ...

Green = Comments/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I woke up in a room, I hope. I don’t know what you wanted to say here, why did you ...

Not so good, I tend to get hit on the head a lot. ~Brenna .: Have you ever danced in the moonlight?

Try replacing 'and' with 'as'. Or you can just post it, without knowing what has happened I don't know how to help.

Only when it comes to Vana. ~Brenna Me? Of course! ~Monessa I wish you weren't. ~Brenna .: Are you emotional?

Granted. But then you have to dance all night and you get very sore feet! (Sorry, Wigs) I wish I knew more about science than I already do!

Brenna to Sir Gabriel : None of the above apply to me but I'd rather save the village myself. Monessa : If you're The Pans, do not leave a message. ...

Tgis is qi3barssind witjh peijle waytjcinfg. This is embarrassing with people watching.

No, after Bone Hall I've lost my appetite. ~Brenna I have to when I'm casting. ~Monessa .: Do you have any bad habits?