Myriadne

Nice poem, its sweet. Each time I'm sad, you're always there To solve my problems and listen to my deepest fears. Waiting to mend it all with a single kiss. ...

I liked this, you have captured feeling and that is often very difficult to do, good job! One small thing that is purely personal, I didint like the line "this ...

I love your use of languge, it is wonderful. Just a small nitpick though, She knew the second the shawl fell from her shoulders and the saw the purity that ...

My heritage is pretty boring, pure Indian down both sides of the family tree, but I was born and raised in New Zealand and my parents were born and raised ...

I just got back from five fantastic days in Northland (the north part of the New Zealand) as it is summer down here for us southern hemisphere folk, but I ...

Thanks for the comments and crit I really appreciate it :)

Do you remember when we used to play limbs intertwined one person two heads? How about the coppery taste of blood As I pulled your first Tooth? A callous sacrifice ...

Please post things one at a time. I will just crit the first one. I really liked it, it reminded me of Delerium from the sandman comics. Personally I like ...

I waited last night, My hair in place for you, Hours of finding a perfect top,

I think censorship insults the intelligence of the population, especially censorship on moral grounds as it usurps the right of an individual to choose what is "right" for them in ...

Your rhyme scheme is good, its natural and doesn't seem forced. I think you have done a good job with this poem.

I think this is a truly excellent poem because it actually made me feel something. Wonderfully written, I have no critiscism at all.

I agree with matt. I really like the last stanza which is where you truly seem to capture the emotion. Fix the grammar and it would be a lot better ...

Your rhyme scheme is very natural and works well up till the last line which in my opinion doesn't really fit very well. Other than that I found this very ...

I am going to be blunt because I am tired. I think this has a lot of potential but as it stands it is very two dimensional. You don't really ...