Myriadne

Mirror mirror on the wall Who’s the fairest of them all You with your dark hair and dusky eyes Lips a sinners plum Each word a delicate blossom Spilling, sweet ...

I loved the line "but you could always fake expensive things like love". I liked this one a lot. You have captured something here and it is brilliant.

I really like this poem, you have a great sense of language and how to make words work well together.

I really liked this, it has a great flow and your imagery is gorgeous! The only crit I have is that I personally don't like the last stanza, "City lit ...

This poem has potential. The way I see it, it is over-written. You are spoon feeding your reader what you mean. That said though, I am of the school of ...

Keane! urrggh velvet revlover annoy me so much Keane Vs Eagle Eye Cherry (anyone remember him?)

Nirvana Nirvana vs Sublime

Presidents of the USA (wholly on virtue of the peaches song) vs Live

I really like this, you really capture the essence of your character. I do think however that the third stanza jarrs the flow of the poem a bit, it is ...

Very nicely written, you have quite a tight structure and it flows well. Its very well balanced and easy to read, I quite like it :)

Thanks for the comments, I guess you are right about "etch" I might change it.

1. Dammit Ani you stole mine, so I'll go with sloth 2. Cornflakes 3. Purple 4. Chester 5. Salt water 6. jupiter 7. On my left elbow

Eh I figured why not, my hair needs a wash in this phot though, lol.

It starts of well but looses its threads as it goes on, I think you need to tighten your style and focus the poem more.

This poem has potential but I think it could do with some tweaking. I like the first line of the first stanza, it got me intrigued. However I didint like ...