My-mystique-Eyes

I think it could use some punctuation and maybe different placing of the lines. It may just have been me but I kept stumbling over it, It didn't seem to ...

I think it could use some punctuation and maybe different placing of the lines. It may just have been me but I kept stumbling over it, It didn't seem to ...

hey good poem. i think it could use some more punctuation tho it would help it flow a little better. :)

thanx guys, thats really encouraging and helpful. I've already fixed it up a little more, but i'll keep working on it when i get back home. Thanks. :D

Okay, you guys. I changed it...A LOT! But I really do not know if this just sucks more than the other one. I think it's longer than it used 2 ...

Yea, Well...I'm trying to grow out of this word. And I'm making slow progression. But it helped me to get all the hurt out, i think it's a part of ...

Thank you. It's nice to have a good opinion as well as one thats harsh, but pushes me to make something better. Sometimes, when u only hear bad reveiws it ...

I dance, But you don't see me. I sing, But you don't hear me. I try so hard to be beautiful, But your eyes pass right over me, and fall ...

Okay, umm....i really did not understand this poem very much at all. I didn't really like it either. That doesn't mean that it's worthless, I just didn't get anything out ...

wow, this is cool. I liked it because at times, i can relate. it's very depressing but interesting. I'm not really sure how you can improve it, other than what ...

wow, this is really sweet. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing it. Well I think that your biggest problem is that there were wayyy too many coma's where ...

This is a poem about why I always say sorry. It's basically just me expressing myself. So if it sucks as bad as i think it does, then tell me ...

WOW! That was really amazing! :D I really liked it. I like the way that you put the words together, they were very pretty and you had a nice flow. ...

hey everyone, thanx for all your advice! :D I do plan on taking your advice and fixing it where it gets messy and putting some effort into finding more poetic ...

Not very poetic, just something that came 2 my mind so i wrote it down. (Adour means midnight in kenya.) Adour. Midnight lies, behind your eyes. I will journey through ...